Thursday, 21 January 2016

From Script to Screen: Online Greenlight Review

1 comment:

  1. OGR 22/01/16

    Burglar / Fireworks / Haunted House (I think?!)

    Hi Zoe,

    I wonder if this story might not be better if the ‘haunted house’ is a fake? Imagine that you’ve got a neighborhood of houses. Your principle character is actually a boy/girl – plucky, resourceful and an amateur crime-fighter! There’s been a spate of burglaries in the neighborhood and your character sets out to capture him and teach him a lesson. There’s an old lady living in the house across the road, and the child sees a man loitering outside, and knows it’s the burglar and knows that the old lady is his next victim. The child smiles – he/she has a plan. We see the child gathering items together; string, old sheets, and some left-over fireworks from the garden shed.

    Next scene: it’s dark, and now the story focuses on the burglar; he breaks into the old lady’s house; it’s dark – suddenly, scary things begin to happen; draws fly open; we hear blood curdling screams; the burglar drops his torch; he looks around – sees a candle, lights it, but it isn’t a candle it’s a firework – bang! – the burglar’s face all black and his hair standing up in singed smoking spikes etc. Essentially then, the child and the old lady have rigged the house to appear like it’s haunted… the burglar flees the house and runs straight into the arms of an awaiting policeman… Mission accomplished!